Thursday, January 17, 2013

CAN IT BE TOO BRIGHT?




Driving at dawn,
during a moment of humanity, I cursed the sun
shinning much too brightly in my eyes. Blind
I had to keep going, fearing a crash.
When I could see again, I was contrite.
How could I offend what simply exists
to give me light?

Then I thought of you.

(Submitted to Poetry Jam and G-Man's 55.)
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25 comments:

  1. MaryJanuary 17, 2013 at 10:50 AM

    Oh, I have had those driving moments too. Very DANGEROUS and frightening indeed, especially when they happen when one is speeding along on the expressway.

    So glad to see you in Poetry Jam, Myrna! Welcome.

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  2. Brian MillerJanuary 17, 2013 at 10:51 AM

    oh dang...nice last line myrna...but i will confess i have cursed the sun in the same scenario before...maybe i should curse those that set our days schedule so its always in my face....ha...nah, there is wisdom in that question...as much as bite in that last line...

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  3. GraceJanuary 17, 2013 at 11:03 AM

    A lovely ending question and line ~

    And such a stunning picture too ~

    Happy day to you ~

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  4. PeggyJanuary 17, 2013 at 12:08 PM

    That last lime opens up a whole different vista. Excellent. I have rarely driven at sunrise but from your poem I can imagine it perfectly. Thanks.

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  5. ClaudiaJanuary 17, 2013 at 12:50 PM

    oh wow..that closure is fantastic... the sun part reminded me much of the californian sun...esp. at dusk and dawn on the freeway, i drove half-way blind often...dangerous...

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  6. CloudiaJanuary 17, 2013 at 1:01 PM

    perfect little poem;
    then the last line:
    Sublime!
    Aloha Poet Myrna

    from Honolulu,
    Comfort Spiral
    ~ > < } } ( ° >
    > < } } ( ° >

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  7. Sherry Blue SkyJanuary 17, 2013 at 2:37 PM

    Oh this poem packs a wallop - so much to think about in so few lines - and leaves me wondering who the "you" is that you thought of. A great write, Myrna!

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  8. Becky AndrewsJanuary 17, 2013 at 5:11 PM

    ANOTHER beautiful writing.

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  9. Galen PearlJanuary 17, 2013 at 7:04 PM

    I was just thinking about light this afternoon. I looked out the window at 5:00 and realized it was still light. The light returns in the depths of winter. So wonderful.

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  10. SandyCarlsonJanuary 17, 2013 at 8:03 PM

    Killer ending. I know this experience. You make great use of it in this beautiful poem.

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  11. kelvin s.m.January 17, 2013 at 8:07 PM

    ...well expressed... and yes, too much of something can bring danger too... a wonderful realizations.. smiles...

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  12. Amrit SinhaJanuary 17, 2013 at 10:22 PM

    "How could I offend what simply exists
    to give me light?

    Then I thought of you." A beautiful line ... just loved it !!!

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  13. LydiaJanuary 18, 2013 at 2:08 AM

    This is poignant and powerful. A great 55.

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  14. my heart's love songsJanuary 18, 2013 at 3:13 AM

    may i just say ~ what Green Speck said. a really stunning poem, Myrna! Love it!

    ♥
    dani

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  15. Dave KingJanuary 18, 2013 at 5:01 AM

    My sort of poem. Delightful.

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  16. UnknownJanuary 18, 2013 at 5:29 AM

    I know that feeling! What an ending!

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  17. kaykualaJanuary 18, 2013 at 7:24 AM

    Appreciating it but for some irritating moments is ok! Nicely Myrna!

    Hank

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  18. G-ManJanuary 18, 2013 at 10:11 AM

    Thats why God invented Ray Bans!!
    Besides, you of all people Myrna should know that the Sun NEVER sets on the Cool!
    Loved your always uplifting 55
    Thanks for playing, you are always a positive ray of hope in an otherwise cloudy sky. Have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  19. HelenJanuary 18, 2013 at 10:16 AM

    Great poem ... we have tons of sunshine here on Oregon's high desert. Late afternoon is the worst. I have cursed it a few times when navigating my car.

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  20. vandana sharmaJanuary 18, 2013 at 10:25 AM

    one can feel the sun rays irritating the eyes while reading the poem. very nicely written..:)

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  21. Mary Ann PotterJanuary 18, 2013 at 12:53 PM

    The last two lines caught me. We have all done that...

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  22. UnknownJanuary 18, 2013 at 4:21 PM

    I have some wicked photophobia. I appreciate your 55 very much.

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  23. izzyJanuary 18, 2013 at 5:19 PM

    Bringing it back around to people-I don't know that used to drive me CRAZY! thanks.

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  24. hedgewitchJanuary 20, 2013 at 10:06 AM

    That last line really recasts the poem, and deepens it so beautifully--and it was doing just fine before that, too. 55 excellent words.

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  25. MargaretJanuary 24, 2013 at 6:59 PM

    Very sweetly written.

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